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My world has gone ahead and left me here
To keep myself awake through lonely nights.
I cannot help but wonder, wait, and fear;
And fight between the weights of wrong and right.
Warmth has left, and in it's place --a shiver
Now keeps me from the realm of blessed sleep.
You were once my strength, but now I quiver,
For when you left you took with you my peace.
So my heart will try to beat --but faintly.
I'll sit in patience 'waiting your return.
The life I felt before --a distant mem'ry.
With every breath I take I feel the burn.
I made the choice to love and set you free --
Embracing hope, I wish you back to me.
This is a sonnet I wrote for an English assignment.
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depech94 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Student General Artist
so pretty
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SamanthaMarie258 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Student General Artist
I had the same assignment in creative writing, sonnets are way more difficult than they seem. Congrats on, first of all, being able to write one, and it telling a beauitiful and very relatable story.
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NightWhisper1025 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2010
Aw, thanks! I appreciate that!
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vividrose Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2010   Writer
very beautiful
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thunderstar101 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2009
So beautiful. Very well written. :)
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NightWhisper1025 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009
Thank you so much! Kind words mean a lot to me :D
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legendary-1 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2008
why can't people just wite for the sake of writing anymore anyway enough with the random stuff, real nice poem. I enjoyed that quite a lot a soft gentle read for me. But to me it is just a good poem heck it was for english so i am guyessing you did it just to get by. I feel with a topic that is quite relevant to all when people leave you, we have all expierienced that one way or another and if that's the case you have to try and show why your expierience is unique compared to others and that's partly why you write. The poem wasn't heart stopping but it was nice. Good use of punctuation and your use of verbs is impressiven i don't know how but give me powerful imagery something to make me want to read it again and again. I love that in poems i think it is a sign of creativity. I'm not the best poet in the world so it's pretty hipocritic to say it wasn't strong enough because i think you most probably could outwrite me. So take it or leave it
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Loyalyak Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2007
This is beautiful. I have always loved sonnets. I try to write according to a specific style sometimes, but I find it very difficult.

I have recently let go of a love so this poem rings very true to me.
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